Story Update- Vignettes

rib here with an update of the vignettes in the story. the story team decided to do 3 before and after scenes from the turning point (shrub incident). in short, there are 7 vignettes total. in detail:
B.S. (before shrub)
1. Digging holes to plant seeds - gardener stops robot from digging up a bush (close call grabs shovel) - gardener still grasping the shovel, directs it to correct place to dig (robot swivels, legs do not move)
2. Weeding (willy-nilly)
3. Planting seeds (same scenario where robot pats the dirt too hard)
--shrub incident-- (same scenario where robot shears too much of a sapling)
[mangled shrub is brought back in final scene and put in robot (gardener repairs it / regrows]
A.S. (after shrub)
1. Raking side by side (robot starts to mimic)
2. Robot is wheeling a squash in a wheelbarrow / gardener is picking beans (camera switches focus - over the shoulder shot)
3. FINAL vignette occurs at sunset / gardener is sitting on bench with a glass of water / looks up / robot is clipping hero tree
OTHER possible vignettes for A.S.
1. gardener turns valve for overhead sprinkler system (success of garden)
2. wiring support for weak plants (point where garden is more lush)
3. 2nd pruning, gardener checks on robot (kneels by him) / pats shoulder

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Story Concept Notes

Hi this is rib reporting for the story team. These are the notes thusfar of our story:
Dawn breaks
Scene illuminating from dark
gardener surveying land
framing robot and gardener
starts robot
gardener hands robot shovel / motions to garden and tubes (gives robot push)
pan down from tree
exit shed
gardener works on plants elsewhere / robot begin digging
cut to robot diging carelessly (mechanically)
over the shoulder of robot -> zoom out to gardener facing camera
gardener shrugs
cut to gardener get hit by lump of dirt
gardener goes to stop robot ("slow it down there")
New day/time
Robot and gardener place pipes (gardener has schematic and tells/points robot directions)
robot overdoes connecting pipes (quick)
cut to gardener face (raises eyebrow)
new vignette
gardener teaches robot how to plant sapling
Robot plants saplings (robot fails at patting dirt around sapling)
new vignette
gardener demonstrates how to prune and goes off
robot over-prunes and leaves fly everywhere / gardener comforts robot ("sometimes things like that happen in life") / robot is dejected
Gardener and robot enter shed for new sapling
(Upon leaving with new saplings) Robot recognizes photo of gardener and stops
Gardener puts sapling down and does significant (characteristic) gesture
robot recognizes from photo / robot makes connection (fade)
Robot performs (series ofprevious tasks) better
Gardener gives appreciation (two thumbs up)
Robot recognizes growth of garden (connection to saplings)
cut to both surveying garden (reference tree)
Gardener motions to robot / shuts off robot (fade)
cut to robot face
slow zoom out to view robot's head
robot recognizes dome on head
cut to robot and gardener at gate / opens gates
robot takes a few steps / turns around Gardener gives him a push
Credits vignettes:
robot walks through desert / finds a stream...
final vignette: robot and gardener posed in reference to photo in shed
end
Note: my /'s do not mean and/or, they are merely divisions
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